- sort out brackets for references all in ()
- google books page numbers
- use clinical aesthetic rather than scientific
- branding for skincare in intro
- Primary focus
- necessary to effective
- Ordinary section:
- highlight continuing barriers for men using skincare products
- addition of masculine skincare brands excuse barrier - give permission
Overall this feedback is very good, allowing for the progression to start writing the conclusion of the essay as these critiques are minor corrections that can be made quickly.
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